Kingdomfall: May Update

“You’re all the same. You think the world owes you a debt. You think the way should be paved with gold and people should sing your praises just because you are who you are. But it takes people like me to show you the real world. All your gold turns to shit, and the people who sing your praises mock you behind your back. The world will turn. You will die. And you will be forgotten.”

That little speech is from later on in the book. Can you guess which one?

Kingdomfall has come a long way and so have the heroes and villains of the story. But this installment is heading towards the end of the first draft. I’ve already identified a few chapters that either need to be completely cut or rewritten. I have yet to place the clues as to where the story is heading, the little bits that make it that much more interesting.

As far as writing goes, I’m on chapter 40. In the last novel I finished at chapter 50, which in theory gives me ten chapters before it comes to a crescendo. Things are taking a turn and I can’t wait for you to read it. I know I’ve been taking my time with the second book, but I assure you, it’s worth the wait.

Recently I’ve been reading Tower Lord by Anthony Ryan, a wonderful piece of writing and the second in the series Raven’s Shadow. I’m truly captivated by the setting and the characters. I’ve also recently picked up Malice by John Gwynne, along with his second book, Valor. Once I’ve finished Tower Lord it’s on to them.

Do you have any recommendations for future reading? Leave suggestions below. You can even let me know how excited you are for the next book in The Kingmaker Saga, I’d be happy to hear it.


Fiverr: Good For Editing? Part 2

Happy Tuesday! So I got my manuscript back for the first book from the lovely person on Fiverr. And I have to say, I’m happy with the results. The thing you have to remember with Fiverr is that you’re paying for a service that is supposed to be a quick turn-around. Some users will fall into the trap of speed editing and miss some things. To be fair, no-one can catch everything when editing. That’s why it takes so many drafts to get your manuscript right. Anyway, onto what I made of my Fiverr proofreading experience!

  • Quick turn-around
  • Good use of notes when editing
  • Help with continuity
  • Suggestions for better reader engagement
  • A mass of grammar editing

The user hasn’t pulled any punches with what their thoughts were on the manuscript, which is what you pay for. If you’re going to write you have to have thick skin, don’t take what they say to heart because they’re saying it to make your writing better! My manuscript was done within two days and the user found things that I’d missed on the second run through. I have a terrible tendency to edit when I’m beyond tired, so things don’t turn out the way I’d seen them in my head.

The service offered was exceptional and my experience with the seller was fluent, their communication with me over what I wanted was brilliant and the user even threw in an update when half-way through.

So, what does that mean for Fiverr editing? It means I had a great experience. But ultimately the advice I can give you is: research your potential proofreader. Not everyone will be the same, not everyone will pick up things, and not everyone will be as good as they say. If there’s one that I would recommend it would be the user jaqwardle. Thanks to her help the first book in The Kingmaker Saga can get a rewrite it deserves.

Jaqwardle Fiverr Profle

Jaqwardle Manuscript Service

Fiverr: Good For Editing? Part 1

Being a writer is hard work. I can’t lie and say that I have an incredible amount of time to run through my own books for editing purposes. My first book, The Kingmaker, was completely self-edited as I couldn’t afford an editor. Being in full-time work as well put a strain on my editing abilities and often leaving me editing late into the night, often causing more errors than fixing them. So I would go back the next day to redo what I more than likely messed up while trying to edit. Eventually I managed to finish the editing and put the book out. Having several good reviews but with the same problems, grammar and editing. So I thought I’d try something new, Fiverr.

For those who don’t know, Fiverr is a catch-all service that allows people to put advertisements up for specific skill sets (now I sound like Liam Neeson…) that can offer their services to people. These things can range from SEO to Brand Design, Business Consultancy to Accounting, Video Editing to Acting, and even people painting stuff on themselves and dancing manically. But the service that mattered for me was the editing and proofreading services. So I did some reading and researched through a few of the people on Fiverr that offered the services until I came across one user that may have matched my needs (and my budget).

After messaging what I needed they came back to me with a custom offer for the work they would do which would consist of spelling, grammar, and consistency using track changes in a Word Document. It seemed like a very good offer so I decided to go ahead with it. The person I’ve decided to use for editing services has received a Masters Degree which helped me with my choice and has also had experience reading pre-release books.

This is something that I’ve had to try out as I’ve found myself without time to edit the first book while I write the second, which is coming along nicely! I’ll keep you up to date with how it goes as the turn around time for the editing is around four days. If it’s great, I’ll recommend this!

Reddit, a hub of information.

I’ve been spending a lot of time lately on Reddit. Most if not all of you will have heard of it. The Internet’s message board with an endless amount of sub-reddits ranging from history to Photoshop Battles. The amount of people exchanging and engaging on the website is incredible, and as a writer, an invaluable source for getting advice on your current work or ideas. For me, I use the Fantasy Writers sub-Reddit. It holds questions and discussions from all sorts of people looking for help with their work, whether it’s just a critique or possibly a discussion on something they’re thinking of doing in their book. Where else would be better to speak to like-minded people about your fantasy works?

Then there’s the World Building sub-Reddit. This place is for you if you like going in-depth about the way your world works and want some advice on where to take things. Some people post maps on there for others to help with geography and layout, some ask for help developing a currency. There’s even help developing magic systems if it’s something you need.

And finally there’s the Fantasy sub-Reddit. A place for lovers of fantasy in all its forms. Whether it be in books, video games, films, etc. It’s a great place to let people know about your book, but don’t just put it on there. Get involved! It’s a community and people won’t like it if you come in and dump your book on them without building some rapport. If you actively engage they will appreciate it and are more likely to take a look at your work.

Those are the three that I visit the most but I’d recommend visiting the site yourself if you haven’t been. There’s a wealth of knowledge there.

Fantasy Writers

World Building


Kingdomfall April Update

The march forward for the next book in The Kingmaker Saga is becoming more like a jog at this point. You’ll be pleased to hear that I’ve had more time to invest in the second in the series and have been tapping away at the keyboard with a renewed vigor! Couldn’t be happier with the way things are turning out, we’re back on track!

Let’s give you an update as to where we are:

  • 50,089 words
  • 35 chapters complete
  • 2 new supporting characters introduced
  • 6 fight scenes
  • a bucket of intrigue
  • a dash of mystery
  • a touch of darkness

It’s all kicking off in Vikinsa with our main characters fighting to survive in this world I’ve carved out for them. I’m still finding as I write that the history gets deeper and richer than ever and as you read you’ll uncover what lies beneath the lies of kings. So you can follow these guys and girls in Kingdomfall: Book II of The Kingmaker Saga:

  • Rhyn – The Kingmaker
  • Dirham Gerard
  • Tiberius Redstorm
  • Carrick Belhound
  • Queen Lissa of Yarmir
  • Titan Goldclaw

Plus supporting characters that have their own chapters to show more of what’s happening around Vikinsa and its kingdoms.

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This is much better news than I brought you last time. I know it’s been a while (Christmas and the such,) but things have taken a turn for the much better for the story. I’m still toiling away with Kingdomfall but had an epiphany a couple of days ago which suddenly made me work a little faster. I’m not afraid to admit that it even made me a little excited! It changes everything!

Okay, so this isn’t a big update. But it is something at least, I’ve kept you all in the dark for too long.

Bad news…

I know, I know. I can’t help it, though. I come bearing bad news this day. As much as I wanted to have Kingdomfall out in November, it has fallen through. There have been a series of unfortunate events that have led to this, but the main one has been a change in jobs. I haven’t left my company, but I have to move department which means a solid two weeks of training that starts early and finishes late. It’s been an incredibly inconvenient time for me. I wish it could be different for this as I really had my hopes up for getting this done by then.

But there is a silver lining to this cloud. I can work harder on this and longer, hopefully bringing you a better sequel. I hope you can all read it soon, I’ve also joined NaNoWriMo this year in a bid to get flowing again and get myself to the point that I can say it’s nearly finished. As we stand it’s doing okay.

Drop me a line if you’re feeling that bad and I’ll console you. I also feel bad.